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"Big Shot"

Wed Nov 12, 2008, 11:10 AM
The screenplay I wrote is called “Big Shot.” The main character is a black geek in his mid-twenties living in Texas. He just became an assistant manager at the grocery store he has worked at since high school.

Trevor is also moving out of his Grandmother’s house over her very vocal disapproval. She thinks it’s a waste of money, he doesn’t care about his poor old Grandmother anymore, and he can’t take care of himself. To help ease her fears over the last one, she gives him his Grandfather’s pistol.

The first night in his new place, a robber does break in, and Trevor shoots and kills him. Suddenly his life is changed. The Sheriff wants him to appear at his campaign rally, the local news media is calling him a hero, and his boss wants him to star in a new commercial for the store.

For the first time in his life, he feels like he is getting the respect he deserves. It all comes crashing down on him in a hilarious way when the local college football team beats the state champions knocking him off the front page. Suddenly, it’s the football team appearing with the Sheriff at the rally while Trevor ends up serving BBQ. Then he finds out his part in the commercial has been changed. The Quarterback is now taking his place.

A plan starts forming in Trevor’s mind after he goes to the police station to pick up his Grandfather’s pistol. While he’s there, he sees a pamphlet about obtaining a Concealed Weapons Permit. A wild daydream and his store getting robbed later, Trevor decides the way to get back in the news is to shoot another robber in an act of premeditated self-defense.

Trevor’s best friend Ben thinks he has lost his mind when he hears about the plan. Ben’s thirteen-year-old brother initially thinks it could be a good idea because they do live in Texas after all, but after looking at his very African American friend, Trevor, he changes his mind.

Ben is very overweight and comes from a rich family. Trevor and Ben have been friends since childhood. Eddie, Ben’s little brother, could be the poster boy for what happens to the children of over-protective parents. He carries around a camcorder that he says is to scare predators away, but what he really uses it for is filming pretty girls when he’s in public. He’s also a gigantic smartass.

I’m very happy with the way it turned out.

Here is a sample of the over-the-top daydream shootout scene. It's a comedy, so I made it cheesy and as funny as I could. [link]

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And Me If I Am 1.
If U Get 7 Back U R Loved

1-3 u r a bad friend
4-6 u r a ok friend
7-9 u r a good friend
10-& ^ u r a great friend

Dear Friend,
When u feel like crying....call me. ! . ! . !
I dont promise that I will make u laugh,
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I dont promise to ask u to stop......
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If one day u dont want to listen to anyone.....
call me.
I promise to be there for u
but also promise to remain quiet.
But one day if u call......
and there is no answer.....
come fast to see me.
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cHINESE HOROSCOPE:
AMAZINGLY ACCURATE
Whatever you do, don't cheat!

CHINESE HOROSCOPE :
THE YEAR OF THE IRON DRAGON,
WISHING YOU PROSPERITY AND GOOD FORTUNE IN THE
CHINESE NEW YEAR

FOLLOW THE INSTRUCTIONS -
DO NOT CHEAT
OR IT WON'T WORK AND
YOU WILL WISH YOU HADN`T.

TAKE 3 MINUTES
TRY THIS - IT WILL FREAK YOU OUT.

THE PERSON WHO SENT THIS TO ME SAID
HER WISH CAME TRUE 10 MINUTES AFTER SHE FORWARDED THE EMAIL

NO CHEATING !!!!









THIS GAME HAS A FUNNY / CREEPY OUTCOME.

DO NOT READ AHEAD, JUST DO IT.

IT TAKES ABOUT 3 MINUTES - WORTH A TRY

1st. Get PEN and PAPER

2nd. WHEN CHOOSING NAMES, MAKE SURE THEY ARE REAL PEOPLE THAT YOU ACTUALLY KNOW

3rd. GO WITH YOUR FIRST INSTINCTS !!!!! Very important for good results.

4th. SCROLL DOWN

ONE LINE AT THE TIME
DON`T READ AHEAD
otherwise
YOU WILL RUIN THE FUN.









1. On a blank sheet of paper, WRITE NUMBERS 1 through 11 in a COLUMN on the LEFT.












2. BESIDE the NUMBERS 1 & 2 ,

WRITE DOWN ANY
2 NUMBERS YOU WANT..

DO YOU HAVE A FAVORITE NUMBER?














3. BESIDE the NUMBERS 3 & 7 ,

WRITE DOWN THE NAMES OF TWO MEMBERS
OF THE OPPOSITE SEX.











CAUTION: DO NOT LOOK AHEAD or IT WILL NOT TURN OUT RIGHT














4. WRITE ANYONES NAME

(like FRIENDS or FAMILY...)
next to 4, 5, & 6 .













DON`T CHEAT OR YOU`LL BE UPSET THAT YOU DID













5. WRITE down FOUR SONG TITLES in 8, 9, 10, & 11
















6. Finally,

MAKE A WISH

















ARE YOU READY?
HERE IS THE

KEY TO THE GAME


1. THE NUMBER of PEOPLE YOU MUST TELL ABOUT THIS GAME is found in

SPACE 2





2. THE PERSON IN SPACE

3 IS THE ONE YOU LOVE






3. THE PERSON YOU LIKE but your relationship CANNOT WORK is in

SPACE 7






4. YOU CARE MOST about the PERSON you put in

SPACE 4







5. THE PERSON YOU NAME IN NUMBER 5 IS THE ONE WHO

KNOWS YOU VERY WELL.







6. THE PERSON YOU NAMED IN 6 IS YOUR

LUCKY STAR







7. THE SONG IN 8 IS THE SONG THAT MATCHES WITH THE

PERSON IN NUMBER 3






8. THE TITLE IN 9 IS THE SONG FOR THE

PERSON IN 7







9. THE 10 TH SPACE IS THE SONG THAT TELLS YOU MOST ABOUT

YOUR MIND






10. AND 11 IS THE SONG TELLING HOW YOU

FEEL ABOUT LIFE






11. NUMBER 1 IS YOUR

LUCKY NUMBER

SEND THIS TO A MINIMUM OF
10 PEOPLE
WITHIN AN HOUR OF READING THIS.



IF YOU DO, YOUR WISH WILL COME TRUE.

IF YOU FAIL TO, IT WILL BECOME THE OPPOSITE

STRANGE HOW IT SEEMS TO WORK.

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